Ch. 12 Page 11
dragonsong12 on March 28, 2010
Well, I guess I'll have to take back my joke that all the characters do in this is stand around and talk.
It HAS been pretty easy to do dialogue on these pages though.
I'm not really terribly fond of this page, though, it's not bad, but I don't think it's as strong as the ones before it. It's not dynamic enough. But the plus side of making pages that disappoint, is that you learn from them. I took a look, figured what bothered me, and fixed it. So the next couple of pages are far more dynamic. Whoo!
Thanks for reading! See you next week!
HawkandFloAdventures at 3:41PM, Dec. 26, 2022
Adam West Batman is proud of that POW sound effect :D
dragonsong12 at 7:51PM, Dec. 26, 2022
He should beat him with the sound effects too!
Bluesox at 9:53PM, March 31, 2010
POW! OW! >0
Bhudicae at 9:50AM, March 31, 2010
WOW!! O.o I go without a conputer for a couple weeks and BAM! This is what I get to catch up to! GET HIM, TREN!! RAAR!!
VladimirSlavik at 1:07PM, March 30, 2010
Ah, I'd say it's rather that in black/white both of them have similar "colour scheme". Only the scars help distinguish them... The patterns are not as visible here as in previous pages, though. Of course it might be intentional. Either way, it's intense for sure ;-)
Mikato at 10:53AM, March 30, 2010
Poor Tren thats gotta suck
crocodile___smile at 12:31PM, March 29, 2010
sorry, blurry's not the word i should have used. the images are amazing... but the composition is chaotic, which i think is what vladimirslavik was getting at. however, it's very possible that a cultivation of visually startling chaos was exactly what you were going for.
crocodile___smile at 12:28PM, March 29, 2010
the images are great and full of energy, but confused and blurry. kinda of like a brave heart action scene. maybe that's what you were going for? the quick, haphazard impressions that accompany the crashing of bodies? if that's not what you're going for, maybe those motion lines that super hero comics add to punches and kicks might make it clearer "what belongs to whom"
JillyFoo at 9:35AM, March 29, 2010
If you want to learn some dynamic panel angles study this guy's comic! http://www.nofna.com/ It helped me.
SweetSong at 5:52AM, March 29, 2010
OW. Did Tren just punch Scarboy's head from both sides or just one? 'Cause if it was both, and each landed on the ears, that guy's eardrums would be toast and Tren would have won.
VladimirSlavik at 2:37AM, March 29, 2010
It's getting hard to make out what belongs to whom...
Lupina24 at 12:57AM, March 29, 2010
this is getting to be a rough fight, poor Tren.