Hey everyone again! Some more exploring of Raven before we hit the action once more… I am not sure I like this page entirely, though I did work on it a lot.
Still, I did manage to give Zoe a pity trip while she can still have it- she's not the type to mope a lot… he he he! I am looking forward to the next two pages- I may even have them up by Friday, just to share the ‘pick-on-David’ game with you all.
Interesting story so far.. Can't tell what's going on yet. Is Raven inhuman or just crazy? And why was there a weird ghouly guy.. And who shot her.. aaa too many questions.
I like all the folds you put in people's clothing, and the details in all your art. The whole comic is very vibrantly colored. Is that intentional?
One suggestion - don't write all slanty-like. It's hard to read. And I'd like it better if all the text bubbles were consistantly the same color. This page is actually pretty good, they're almost all yellow. Almost.
katyas at 6:44PM, May 23, 2008
Raven was mentioned early on as being a "demented wolf girl" (this was by David) And finally we learn why Zoe wears that bandage!
mjkj at 2:10PM, Nov. 8, 2006
I think it is great - except of being a bit yellowish
ZoeStead at 4:59AM, Oct. 18, 2006
Heh interesting work! Great characters!
MrGranger at 4:57PM, Oct. 17, 2006
Work on the lettering and you've got a hit.
Jenshin at 4:53PM, Oct. 17, 2006
Interesting story so far.. Can't tell what's going on yet. Is Raven inhuman or just crazy? And why was there a weird ghouly guy.. And who shot her.. aaa too many questions. I like all the folds you put in people's clothing, and the details in all your art. The whole comic is very vibrantly colored. Is that intentional? One suggestion - don't write all slanty-like. It's hard to read. And I'd like it better if all the text bubbles were consistantly the same color. This page is actually pretty good, they're almost all yellow. Almost.
subcultured at 3:37PM, Oct. 17, 2006
nothing to be scared about. i like it, you just need to computerize your text