Chapter 5, page 3
Tantz_Aerine on July 21, 2007
Hello everyone!
Behold page three, and more things revealed! And I think Darwin is going to be proven right, when once, sometime back in chapter two or three she had said that David has yet to become really mad. I think he is about to show us just how mad he can be right about now ;)
Artistic wise, I am a little ‘eh’ about this page. I like several elements of it- I was trying to go heavy on the expressions here. I am not sure they convey what I wanted to though. What do you think?
Also, on the Voting Incentive: I was told that the image didn't load properly, so I've uploaded it again for you to see if you like. I was slightly miffed to see that it didn't drop down to the whole joke sweater and the tree bark, for which I am so proud. Ah well. It is up there now! If you want, please vote and see it!!
Responds!
Locoma: It was intended to be humorous- David just didn't know what else to say ;) heh. And yes, he is doubly mad for having his sister involved in this affair in such a vile manner. The clothes were provided by the epitome of girliness, the Fiens daughters ;) heheh. David doesn't really buy Zou-zou ‘girly’ clothes. I don't think he has noticed that, though :D
Justnopoint: Thank you! I really did try to get the emotion across.
Phantasim fan: They are truly great indeed :) Thanks for commenting.
adobedragon: I know :( It was not entirely her fault, as Raven was on the ‘good guy’ list until she pulled a gun on Dave and Zoe.
Hyptosis: I think it's grounded like an airplane ;) But it is a little funny when thought of in that way. :)
Peipei: I know. I don't think she's really to blame either, but it was a pretty serious thing- mostly because she had no business meddling with Zoe's stuff.
I heart artists: Thanks! These few pages until the action hits again, I am trying for a lot of emotion.
I hate Reality: heh heh! Oh noes indeed! Though where she will be grounded remains to be seen XD
Darwin: Truly, he hasn't been eager to do so. Now he's really angry, too! XD heheeheh. And yes, Raven will need to get her comeuppance, ne? ;)
Ozoneocean: Drat! I knew I shouldn't have drawn those door numbers. XD And yes, Zou-zou really is sorry, because she loves Zoe and she just realised this is definitely not a game.
usedbooks: Unfortunately yes; they are very easy to mould in the hands of those with bad intention.
D0m: Well, she should have known better than giving out Zoe's things to anyone, but as far as trust goes, Raven was not a stranger, and up to now David and Zoe sort of trusted her to be on the proper side. So she is to blame a little, but she is not to be blamed for the deceit entirely. As for the whites of the eyes, like I said in pq, I fill them in or leave them unfilled depending on the emotions I want to get across and how I feel they are communicated with or without whites. As for the shading part, I have tried shading this comic, but it doesn't feel right like it does with other comics I have. I can't explain why, but it just doesn't feel as it should be when shaded all the way. :)
And that's that! Until next time!
katyas at 3:30PM, May 27, 2008
Oh .... crap. Things are getting ... a little out of control, now, aren't they? Ai yi yi ...
Locoma at 9:55PM, July 27, 2007
You know, the more I hear the fiens daughters talking, the smarter they sound to me... or is it this one? I don't know why I thought they were a typical blonde stereotype, anyway... Go get them David! Tantz, be careful, it seems that David wants to reveal all of your secrets for this story! I second what D0m said about your writing! And about your style, I remember one time you did Wolf in a different style and everybody complained because of it. It was chapter 2, page 9. Hehe, that's the price for having people totally hooked on your comic :D
dueeast at 11:27AM, July 27, 2007
I like the subtlety of the lighting and colors. The mood builds nicely, too. It's good to see this side of David...and I liked the "answer your stupid phone" line, too! :) Looking forward to the next page as well.
adobedragon at 9:14AM, July 24, 2007
Giggle. "Answer your stupid phone." Heh. Pretty much what I was thinking, except in my R-rated brain, there were a lot more expletives.
dracco at 3:00PM, July 23, 2007
Woooo... suspense....
Peipei at 11:02PM, July 22, 2007
I have a feeling somebody is gonna get hurt soon...Dave has this sort of sexy aura about him when he's angry :o...can't wait to see him get super pissed :3 hehehehe
Ozoneocean at 6:31PM, July 22, 2007
Zou Zou might be sorry, but it looks like what she's done is worse and worse. :( Ah, the expressions and body language are so very real here!
D0m at 4:03PM, July 22, 2007
I love panel 4 and 7 with the blonde. I'm gonna read your archives someday! Your writing is top-notch, by the way...
usedbooks at 2:24PM, July 22, 2007
Whole lotta deceit going on. Very interesting.
I heart artists at 1:53PM, July 22, 2007
Answer that phone!!!! Whew...that was tense!
MrRiot at 12:37PM, July 22, 2007
Dun dun DUNNNNNNNN
Darth Mongoose at 12:35PM, July 22, 2007
The text looks a little funny on this page, kind of washed out, like it was added in with a biro. A stronger black for inking the letters would look better.
I hate Reality at 12:00PM, July 22, 2007
Yay... *dies of anxiety for next page*