I'm going to be honest it needs work. Firstly spelling always spell check if you typing is that bad. That will also fix your grammer.
Next the text boxes could be better. A black border is recommended to make them stand out. Tails on them to show who is speaking couldn't hurt.
One last thing as it stands your characters are rather... generic. Perhaps spend a little time actually deciding on thier personalities a bit more before they appear.
That being said I see the potential for improvement, some of your jokes were amusing but not that great. Please don't take this offensively I am trying to help.
Alex58 at 6:48PM, Jan. 23, 2007
I say that you don't put a 3D sprite in a 2D world.
Shade at 10:39PM, July 28, 2006
I'm going to be honest it needs work. Firstly spelling always spell check if you typing is that bad. That will also fix your grammer. Next the text boxes could be better. A black border is recommended to make them stand out. Tails on them to show who is speaking couldn't hurt. One last thing as it stands your characters are rather... generic. Perhaps spend a little time actually deciding on thier personalities a bit more before they appear. That being said I see the potential for improvement, some of your jokes were amusing but not that great. Please don't take this offensively I am trying to help.