- An Errand For Elm (#1- Too Early To Get Up)
LupaLynn on Jan. 14, 2006
Urk…. This comic isn't that great, and is probably not the best way to start out. I've found that my weakest writing area is in exposition. Once I get a story up and going, I'm fine, but getting it started is another story. (I've had to put off doing a few other drawn comics that I want to do because I can't come up with a good way to begin them… this is really becoming a big problem for me.)
If I can get through these first few tedious pages and get Gold (perhaps his name should have bene Nickel since this is Nickel Version, but it doesn't feel right calling him anything except Gold) out of his house and to the lab, everything should be fine. Then I'll have to come back and redo this page after I've improved my writing skills.
As further proof of how bad my writing is, I didn't get Gold's personality to come across as I wanted it to. He seems too whiney…. The reason he doesn't want to go is that he'd much rather just go back to bed; and though he wants to become a Pokemon Trainer, the promise of a Pokemon isn't enough because he's in no hurry to get out and start adventuring. I suppose the other thing I need to work on is characterization….
My sprites aren't all that great, but they could have been a lot worse. Obviously, I'm still getting the hang of creating sprites rather than just ripping them…. When I come back to rewrite this page, I'll also have to make a new one of Gold's mom.
Well, that's all I have as far as complaints, so I'll shut up until Thursday.
Nintendude at 7:38AM, June 30, 2006
His name is gold?
Megasonic at 6:27PM, May 20, 2006
To Commie: You also make a pokemon comic!
Eugus Maximus at 11:08PM, Feb. 20, 2006
HA! That's great!
LordCommunistFox at 7:08PM, Jan. 18, 2006
Y34|-|, |\|0 5|-|17!
Zwuh at 6:42AM, Jan. 18, 2006
Well... for starters this is - as has been previously pointed out - yet another Pokemon comic. No points for originality there. Also, it starts off essentially the same as they all do... which is exactly the way the games do. I do think that if you're going to all the trouble of creating your own sprites instead of ripping (which I commend, by the way), then why not create original characters and story? This is as dull as dishwater the way it is. In terms of exposition, the general rule of thumb is to show first and explain later. That way people can get interested in the characters/story/world before being bombarded with information and they might actually care enough to read it.
ZoeStead at 2:47AM, Jan. 18, 2006
Nice work, keep it up :D
LordCommunistFox at 4:46PM, Jan. 17, 2006
Great ANOTHER fucking Pokemon comic!
Mettuar_Hunter at 7:33PM, Jan. 16, 2006
Dude, this RULES!
ccs1989 at 10:07AM, Jan. 16, 2006
Surprisingly readable for a sprite comic. But I've always had some strange thing for pokemon since it was the first GB game I played.
KevinClifford at 7:27PM, Jan. 15, 2006
Dude ... that's like too cliched ... Everyone with a PKMN comic's done that ... Hell ... Even I'VE done that ... "And" it's the most over used word in the English Language.
MadMaddie at 7:09PM, Jan. 15, 2006
Eck, yes, exposition is so hard to write. But I'm certainly following the comic. Awesome sprites and very neat paneling.
DemonicChocobo at 6:30PM, Jan. 15, 2006
That's a pretty good gold sprite.
Vaati at 5:27PM, Jan. 15, 2006
I've found that my weakest writing area is in exposition. Once I get a story up and going, I'm fine, but getting it started is another story. I have this same problem.
DMFox at 3:36PM, Jan. 15, 2006
and... haha, good point
Darkside at 3:29PM, Jan. 15, 2006
Muy excelente, compared to other sprite comics this is awsome. and if you can draw why not, you know, draw?