Wow. This was pretty horrible. The speech balloons are in the wrong order, so many grammar mistakes, one funny joke through the whole thing. If anyone wants a good Mario RPG comic, come to mine.
I concur. While I applaud you trying out the "free form" format for panels, you need to keep some actual structure to it. As in, the rows still need to match up. It's really hard to keep up when you get to the second row, because the first and second panels get split up by the tall one on top.
Anyway, aside from a few spelling and grammar errors, it's looking good. Keep on keeping on.
mattboy115 at 8:08PM, April 4, 2013
Wow. This was pretty horrible. The speech balloons are in the wrong order, so many grammar mistakes, one funny joke through the whole thing. If anyone wants a good Mario RPG comic, come to mine.
Vagabond at 7:50PM, June 12, 2007
I concur. While I applaud you trying out the "free form" format for panels, you need to keep some actual structure to it. As in, the rows still need to match up. It's really hard to keep up when you get to the second row, because the first and second panels get split up by the tall one on top. Anyway, aside from a few spelling and grammar errors, it's looking good. Keep on keeping on.
Zheror at 5:40PM, June 12, 2007
Dude. Put them in READABLE order! Mother frakker.