Ep. 1 Page 9
Abt_Nihil on Aug. 15, 2007
Again, you can probably see that here I was still experimenting with the toning. (In case you're wondering why I'm always writing in past tense: I've been working constantly on this series for the past six years, right now I'm working on the script for episode 6, eps. 1 and 2 were drawn over the past year.)
A bit of making-of info: The script on this first episode was pretty tight, concerning the dialogue… but little things and scene transitions were worked out right on the page, like Mr Motes taking his headache pill here.
EDIT:
Midge28: You're right… I'm using atmospheric images (the door opening, the pill in the glass) to indicate scene changes, but it's far from obvious. Still I've always been hesitant to use text bars indicating the location… I'm trying to get a hang of that.
simonitro at 11:34AM, Oct. 9, 2007
The story is giving me the chills everytime I progress reading it... Amazing... very enjoyable.
Fitz at 10:38AM, Aug. 21, 2007
Yeah it is a bit confusing, but now that you told us what marks the scene change it'll make things much easier to figure out next time. Btw, I LOVE how detailed the bubbling pill is. As you can probably tell from my own comic, I love paying attention to little, seemingly insignificant details - and so do you.
TheMidge28 at 8:13AM, Aug. 16, 2007
You know I love you art and page design...especially that last frame with the fish bowl angle...one things stands...the jumping around is a little confusing...from last page to this page and then the page previous to last page...its little hard to keep track with all the scene changes and not text advising of the change or transition tools being used...just a thought...