This is a successful page I believe. I tried to make the text more interesting by the ‘note pad’ scraps around it (got that idea from Watchmen) and I like the colors.
It's been a while since I stopped by -- just found you back on the DD again. I have to say that your skills with painting have improved soooo much since I last saw. You've really come a long way as an artist! Be proud! ^_^
I think the only problem here is you need to work on the art part of the comic its pretty out of proportion. Otherwise its great! Placement story line top notch good job 'cept for that one tweek this comic could be the best.
Funky-funk! I really love how you did the narratives here, man. As the user above said, it worked really well with the angels that you chose.
Good luck with the midterms!
Ah, this is a much better introduction. I like that background question of morals both for the dude being protected against the assassin and of course the motivations of Chain Death himself. xO After such trickery, as much research as this guy is attempting on Chain Death, mayhaps Chain Death will be digging hella lot more info on that guy.... both enemies trying to find each other's weaknesses.... Ah, what a game, indeed.
Nice one here, ccs. I also love the idea of the scraps of paper, and the narrative in general. :) One thing about the page, though, is the middle panel... those sheet wrinkles. They look a bit bumpy for soft fabric; looser, curvier strokes would probably look a bit better. Just a little C&C, though, hope you don't mind.
Good look with those tests! I feel your pain. *cringes.*
I the narrative here, and I like how you did the "scraps of paper" for the text boxes. I think you'll have to do this sort of thing more often, it works really well when you bring the detective into the story.
Good luck on your midterms!
Coydog at 11:52PM, Jan. 24, 2006
Good plot action here and I also like the narrative device, it goes great with that character.
Aywren at 3:29PM, Jan. 24, 2006
It's been a while since I stopped by -- just found you back on the DD again. I have to say that your skills with painting have improved soooo much since I last saw. You've really come a long way as an artist! Be proud! ^_^
ccs1989 at 1:15PM, Jan. 24, 2006
Yeah proportions...expect those to improve.
Radmetalmonk at 10:10PM, Jan. 23, 2006
you can expect 4 asses O_O
Kytenji at 8:12PM, Jan. 23, 2006
I think the only problem here is you need to work on the art part of the comic its pretty out of proportion. Otherwise its great! Placement story line top notch good job 'cept for that one tweek this comic could be the best.
Levi at 4:39PM, Jan. 23, 2006
Funky-funk! I really love how you did the narratives here, man. As the user above said, it worked really well with the angels that you chose. Good luck with the midterms!
Hamorhage at 1:47PM, Jan. 23, 2006
hey! You sure did improve ALOT on your art. The line art is sooo much better now, and the coloring goes well with it!
nebasa at 8:21AM, Jan. 23, 2006
Great page and good luck with your midterms
Fyrsiel at 9:04PM, Jan. 22, 2006
Ah, this is a much better introduction. I like that background question of morals both for the dude being protected against the assassin and of course the motivations of Chain Death himself. xO After such trickery, as much research as this guy is attempting on Chain Death, mayhaps Chain Death will be digging hella lot more info on that guy.... both enemies trying to find each other's weaknesses.... Ah, what a game, indeed.
Ozoneocean at 6:46PM, Jan. 22, 2006
It is good. Those views work nicely and the placement and format of text is fine. The story makes a lot of sense, those poor gaurds! ^^
subcultured at 3:23PM, Jan. 22, 2006
woop
ccs1989 at 2:03PM, Jan. 22, 2006
Izzy- I don't mind. But of course, there are DEAD people under the sheets. But yeah still. It could be smoother.
Izzy at 12:25PM, Jan. 22, 2006
Nice one here, ccs. I also love the idea of the scraps of paper, and the narrative in general. :) One thing about the page, though, is the middle panel... those sheet wrinkles. They look a bit bumpy for soft fabric; looser, curvier strokes would probably look a bit better. Just a little C&C, though, hope you don't mind. Good look with those tests! I feel your pain. *cringes.*
Mazoo at 10:49AM, Jan. 22, 2006
I the narrative here, and I like how you did the "scraps of paper" for the text boxes. I think you'll have to do this sort of thing more often, it works really well when you bring the detective into the story. Good luck on your midterms!