You know what I dislike? The fact that the upper-case i and lowercase L look exactly alike in the font for the page titles. We need some serifs in there! It looked like I was putting Roman numeral 3 in the title instead of the word “ill” and I had to lowercase the i to make up for it. Argh, argh!
In other bummer news, Diamond decided we're small potatoes and pushed the book's printing date back and now instead of September, it's coming out in October. It's still coming out and can still be ordered though of course, so that's good.
Other news, we got more shirts in the cafepress store for you to ogle at if you like.
And sorry I'm updating this on what appears to be Saturday. What a week, I thought yesterday was Thursday until I heard someone say Friday! I got completely blindsided by time, thanks to my stupid sleep problems. Plus I have to be completely honest, I hated working on this page sooo much, I just hope you can't tell! Hopefully I'll have an easier time with the next one. I think I'm just eager to get to some things and these transition pages are making it a hell of a wait, but they are necessary or else no one would know what's going on, y'know. I could have skipped this I'm sure. I'm not saying the art in this one is bad, but that's because I spent hours going out of my way to cure the suck that was my inkwork, especially with Phineas's hat. I also realized at the last minute that it looks like he switched hands with the poking stick in the last panel, because I cut off some of the bottom. This is just a sample of things that went wrong! No more whining from me though, it is done and now I get to update it. And I waited until this page was done for my cupcake, but since I got a Night School page done I have a cupcake “buffer” as well. Hurray!
Looking between this one and the last it's quite clear you didn't like working on this one just by the brightness of the colors (though i'm betting the medium of brain to visible art was different) and the overall tone of the page (the expressions are more serious again and a little off from what i'm used to seeing expressions wise for the character. Though I gotta say mad love for Daray in this page the colors on his face really bring out the eyes. And phinny's gonna make an enemy of Lezzeria at this rate.
Art differences aside I think there are some potential Daray avies to take from this one. I dont think I've made a Daray avy yet either... Oh God I'm a horrible fan for missing characters to make avies from. -crocodile tear emotes for a while-
In other news would more people kindly start using the CTV forum it's very lonely there with nobody but a handful of people to talk to most of which i'm already conversing with on other mediums as it is.
Anyway today I shall score this one as a 4/5 because quite honestly it's a beautiful piece but I know you can do better Amy after all I've only ever wrote fanfics for two comics and only completed them for this one. -thumbs up- Plus I'm trying to put more effort into my votes instead of just 5-ing away or not voting at all. I want to be honest with my grading after all.
I fixed the numbering, I had my wires crossed when I updated this, sorry! This comic somehow was mislabeled in my files after I tried to number them, and I was didn't pay attention to what the actual site number was.
Also, thank you for the advice again DarkStarZN, you did not offend me at all. But I would like to point out Phineas's fingers have always been stumpy ^_^ And Mye was a victim of my "fixing" too, which is why she's staring off in the other direction, I should improve on that. Phineas is indeed supposed to look stupified though, but you are correct I should have added the sound effect ( I forgot it completely even though I reminded myself several times) As for being rushed, I really wish it was the case here but sadly I stewed over this for the week rather than my better pages that actually were last minute and done in a day, the major difference being I actually enjoyed coloring those! I could share a little bit more of why this was the case, but I don't want to look whiny as it is. But I must apologize to everyone for posting a page like this when you've come to expect better of me, I'll try to make up for it in the next update!
The coloring on this page seems a little off. The colors almost don't seem to match the normal ones. That's what stuck out at me most. But I'll take just about anything if it means an update!
Daray's eyes are very shiny ^_^ I like them. Also Hooray for cupcakes!
I cant think of any cretiquey things for the page, hmmm cupcakes.
*wanders off to color things*
Sorry for the (uber) late reply, Ame, just that I was busy the whole day.
I don't want to offend you, so I'm just going to point out a few things:
First: To me, it seems like that there's too much going on at once. (I usually associate this with frustration, for some reason).
Second: Panel 2. From my POV is looks like that Phineas and Mye are looking in different directions. And Phineas looks a bit stupified.
Third: Phineas' fingers. They seem a but stubby and short to me...
Fourth: Panel 4. Just as a suggestion, but you could've had it where he had just broken the branch off (having the 'snap' sound effect added in).
And lastly (shoudl've been first): the page seems a teeny but rushed. But this could just be my over-critical eye being the bastard it is.
I do apologise if I offended you and/or your comic in anyway. I still formly believe that your comic is the best on DD (Story and art wise).
For You We Offer a Cookie of Relaxation and a hot cup of take-a-lode-off coco. It may be Imaginary, It may be digital. but sometimes it's just nice to be offered something nice.
Aww, bummer! That one was the best panel when I drew it too, well at least in the pencil phase and I didn't totally wreck it in the ink, but this coloring method I used today just didn't do anything justice. Here's what he looked like before I messed it up though, if this image shows up: [IMG]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v173/Zerlocke/darayface.png[/IMG]
I know what you mean though, I was sort of complaining inwardly about it myself. I did the same thing to Charby's face once too... it's hard to tell what expression I was going for.
Whew..your updating schedule really shited into high gear...Fantastic!
IF your really in the mood for constructive criticism, as you hinted at below, I would say the only thing that could use work on this page is on the 3rd panel. All the rest of the characters faces show the hard work that you put into them extremely well. However Daray's face doesn't seem to have much character to it. Seem's more a flesh-colored blob then the low-self-esteemed Dragon hunter we all know and love(at least I do).
Other then I like the rest of the page..your plants are always among the best I've ever seen.
yay, update!
Still Daray's eyes looked way better in the last comic...(also daray has'nt been said for 22 updates, just tought i should point that out)
keep up the good work!
Ka_rin at 8:54PM, Aug. 16, 2008
Looking between this one and the last it's quite clear you didn't like working on this one just by the brightness of the colors (though i'm betting the medium of brain to visible art was different) and the overall tone of the page (the expressions are more serious again and a little off from what i'm used to seeing expressions wise for the character. Though I gotta say mad love for Daray in this page the colors on his face really bring out the eyes. And phinny's gonna make an enemy of Lezzeria at this rate. Art differences aside I think there are some potential Daray avies to take from this one. I dont think I've made a Daray avy yet either... Oh God I'm a horrible fan for missing characters to make avies from. -crocodile tear emotes for a while- In other news would more people kindly start using the CTV forum it's very lonely there with nobody but a handful of people to talk to most of which i'm already conversing with on other mediums as it is. Anyway today I shall score this one as a 4/5 because quite honestly it's a beautiful piece but I know you can do better Amy after all I've only ever wrote fanfics for two comics and only completed them for this one. -thumbs up- Plus I'm trying to put more effort into my votes instead of just 5-ing away or not voting at all. I want to be honest with my grading after all.
Amelius at 8:45PM, Aug. 16, 2008
I fixed the numbering, I had my wires crossed when I updated this, sorry! This comic somehow was mislabeled in my files after I tried to number them, and I was didn't pay attention to what the actual site number was. Also, thank you for the advice again DarkStarZN, you did not offend me at all. But I would like to point out Phineas's fingers have always been stumpy ^_^ And Mye was a victim of my "fixing" too, which is why she's staring off in the other direction, I should improve on that. Phineas is indeed supposed to look stupified though, but you are correct I should have added the sound effect ( I forgot it completely even though I reminded myself several times) As for being rushed, I really wish it was the case here but sadly I stewed over this for the week rather than my better pages that actually were last minute and done in a day, the major difference being I actually enjoyed coloring those! I could share a little bit more of why this was the case, but I don't want to look whiny as it is. But I must apologize to everyone for posting a page like this when you've come to expect better of me, I'll try to make up for it in the next update!
Killer Kitten at 6:01PM, Aug. 16, 2008
Um how did we go from 738 to 748 did i miss somthing? Or did my computer just go bust?
Mutation at 5:59PM, Aug. 16, 2008
"I'm not a bug" XD That's a winner phrase there, that is.
anonymous at 1:27PM, Aug. 16, 2008
Hmm. #748? There's just a single comic between this one and #738! Mistake in the numbering?
Kaede Higuchi at 12:26PM, Aug. 16, 2008
^^
DoodlestheBear at 12:05PM, Aug. 16, 2008
The coloring on this page seems a little off. The colors almost don't seem to match the normal ones. That's what stuck out at me most. But I'll take just about anything if it means an update!
Neilak20 at 10:34AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Daray's eyes are very shiny ^_^ I like them. Also Hooray for cupcakes! I cant think of any cretiquey things for the page, hmmm cupcakes. *wanders off to color things*
cyberdog at 10:18AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Love the color on this. That little green guy with the top hat looks like a pimp. I WANT A T-SHIRT!
DarkStarZN at 9:20AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Sorry for the (uber) late reply, Ame, just that I was busy the whole day. I don't want to offend you, so I'm just going to point out a few things: First: To me, it seems like that there's too much going on at once. (I usually associate this with frustration, for some reason). Second: Panel 2. From my POV is looks like that Phineas and Mye are looking in different directions. And Phineas looks a bit stupified. Third: Phineas' fingers. They seem a but stubby and short to me... Fourth: Panel 4. Just as a suggestion, but you could've had it where he had just broken the branch off (having the 'snap' sound effect added in). And lastly (shoudl've been first): the page seems a teeny but rushed. But this could just be my over-critical eye being the bastard it is. I do apologise if I offended you and/or your comic in anyway. I still formly believe that your comic is the best on DD (Story and art wise).
Ailorn at 8:48AM, Aug. 16, 2008
LOL that was great! I love how Phin went and got a stick to poke him! Quite a bit of effort just to poke... ^-^ awesome!
Judith Taylor at 6:14AM, Aug. 16, 2008
The inking is so beautiful! It would take me ten years to get that good at the inking. I should probably get started...
ZeroVX at 5:12AM, Aug. 16, 2008
You think Mr. Crazy Elf will learn his lesson after this? *hugs Ames* Do digital hugs help with stress?
Dark Clown at 4:42AM, Aug. 16, 2008
For You We Offer a Cookie of Relaxation and a hot cup of take-a-lode-off coco. It may be Imaginary, It may be digital. but sometimes it's just nice to be offered something nice.
lordlyhour at 3:45AM, Aug. 16, 2008
dary look to me like hge has been stabbed (shocked disbeleif)
telruya at 3:41AM, Aug. 16, 2008
^^
Shewolf2 at 3:05AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Your art is STILL amazing!
GABEHDUH at 3:03AM, Aug. 16, 2008
NEATO PAGE
Amelius at 3:01AM, Aug. 16, 2008
As you can see I tried to compensate for things, and it clearly didn't help!
Amelius at 3:00AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Aww, bummer! That one was the best panel when I drew it too, well at least in the pencil phase and I didn't totally wreck it in the ink, but this coloring method I used today just didn't do anything justice. Here's what he looked like before I messed it up though, if this image shows up: [IMG]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v173/Zerlocke/darayface.png[/IMG] I know what you mean though, I was sort of complaining inwardly about it myself. I did the same thing to Charby's face once too... it's hard to tell what expression I was going for.
Jekyll at 2:45AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Whew..your updating schedule really shited into high gear...Fantastic! IF your really in the mood for constructive criticism, as you hinted at below, I would say the only thing that could use work on this page is on the 3rd panel. All the rest of the characters faces show the hard work that you put into them extremely well. However Daray's face doesn't seem to have much character to it. Seem's more a flesh-colored blob then the low-self-esteemed Dragon hunter we all know and love(at least I do). Other then I like the rest of the page..your plants are always among the best I've ever seen.
rain storm at 2:39AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Heheheh! "Hey, I found a dead bird!" "Cool. What should we do with it?" *rustle rustle* "Dis here's mah pokin' stick!"
woodoo at 2:28AM, Aug. 16, 2008
yay, update! Still Daray's eyes looked way better in the last comic...(also daray has'nt been said for 22 updates, just tought i should point that out) keep up the good work!
Wazaga at 2:27AM, Aug. 16, 2008
yum, cupcakes!
Chameleon Kid at 1:56AM, Aug. 16, 2008
Phineas is so funny! XD (him poking at Sadick with a stick just made me laaauugh.)