Page 84
mlai on Aug. 5, 2008
This page by me. Not the typical reaction ppl were expecting, I hope. This chapter had gone through many revisions (the 1st version is very amateurish/embarassing to look back on); because I'm not using the cliched 10-ton-hammer reaction, I wanted to make sure that there's no hint of Mary Sue fan-pairing. Had it proof-read by 2 ppl.
While drawing Chase, I was thinking "Ugh, she looks ragged.“ Then I thought, ”She did almost die, and then was unconscious for 2 days…" So I kept drawing her this way for the entire page.
Some Middle English translation for you:
yea = yes
bote = way
gramercy = great thanks
breeches = tight pants
Read the companion comic FIGHT 1; both stories take place in the same world.
kyupol at 3:02PM, Aug. 7, 2008
lol
Jabali at 11:45AM, Aug. 7, 2008
great page.
alejkhan at 12:14PM, Aug. 6, 2008
The dialog is really catchy here. I think it's a logical scene after what has happened. Nice, calming, humorous, and romantic!
Evil Emperor Nick at 8:10AM, Aug. 6, 2008
This page is very nice. The lighting effect really gives the page a great presence and nicely give everything a warm feeling.
giovanni at 7:39AM, Aug. 6, 2008
you truly convoyed well a realistic moment and reactions. its rare for something manga-like, heck a comic
mlai at 7:32AM, Aug. 6, 2008
[b]@ JNP:[/b] The "[i]Shrieeek you PERVERT![/i]" reaction isn't unrealistic, it's just overdone. But yes, luckily Chase isn't one to act that way. Nuada is actually 1 of those ppl who understands Chase's speech best, because he's fluent in all human languages (cybernetic enhancement). He's just being awkward. The stick seems ok to me, because this page's paneling are very regular so they're not easy to throw off. I see what you mean, though. [b]@ Ed:[/b] Ofc he did. And yes, I like the cozy feeling of this chapter. Wow both of my proof-readers have gone camping.
edbang at 6:43AM, Aug. 6, 2008
Nuada the boyscout. I'm sure he repaired the clothes too. Everyone should have a household Nuada bot. It is all the rage. Good page. I like the camping scene. With the dialogue and the fire I actually feel warm! Tis the camping season, so this seems so appropriate to me...
JustNoPoint at 5:41AM, Aug. 6, 2008
So for once we finally see a normal reaction to the I had to unclothe you scenario. You're lucky you had Chase here to work with, just about any other anime character and you would have had no choice but to do the whole "she gets mad/awkward moment" thing. I take it Nuada has trouble understanding what she says at times? The only thing that's throwing this page off for me is the pure black stick holding the hut up. It blends in with the panel borders too much. It makes panels 5, 7, 8, 9 look like they are split at an angle making the timing nature of the panels much quicker to read and volatile due to the angles. Also in the last 3 panels the stick holding the hut changes sizes. I know I'm not one to talk about stuff like that, but since Tony3rd gave me feedback pointing that out in my artwork it's something I try to look out for a bit. Though since the plant is gone in the last panels I am wondering if your intent is to have the camera slightly moving around. Looks like the stick is further away in the last 2 panels. Chase is super cute everywhere on this page :3