Chapter One Page 11
D0m on June 23, 2007
Don't even ask why this was delayed. Long story.
Anyway, I made another style change with this one. The inking took about a day to complete, because I was being lazy and half-watching TV. I played around with perspective in the fourth panel and it came out decent. I like it. The first panel would have to be my favorite, though, the pose is very -her-.
Voting incentive this week is how page 11 looked in pencil format, before the 6+ hours of work put into it.
Visit the forums while you're here! Go on. Click the button, we'll kiss you if you give us fanart.
Big thanks to Sarah (as always) for inspiring me to change the font, FAL and ahumphres for inspiring me not to cut corners and draw every damn cobblestone.
As far as plot is concerned, we've established that Charna isn't out to kill the Queen. What happens next will be a bit trippier than then last few pages… what do -you- think will happen next? Where is Charna going?
Page 12 is:
DONE
VOTING INCENTIVE IS A PREVIEW OF THE NEXT PAGE! VOTE AWAY!!!
Because the comment box is NUTS
Bekefel: Thanks! I rather rushed that portion, but I'll be keeping you in mind when I make the background for the next few pages. You'll be seeing a -lot- of weather effects…;-) One more week till the next update, folks!!
Phil- Glad you noticed!
Silentkitty- The Queen doesn't like to look like she's human, if that makes any sense. @_o; Don't tell anyone, but she's still scared out of her mind!! And I'm glad you liked the cobblestones. You have FAL and ahumphres to thank for encouraging me!
Silverwordz- Have no fear! I think the next few pages won't be as intricate as the last few, and I'll be pencilling them into a sketchbook to see if I can directly scan and color… The story's hopefully going to be running along even more soon!
Cs3ink- Welcome! And I like that you feel it!
Nepath- I'm glad you think so! I was actually doubting myself earlier…
Slimredninja- Thanks! I'm glad people are feeling this world! Soon, I want you to be familiar with this place- I want you to know how it smells, tastes, looks and sounds. The land of the shdow is constant thunder and thick, dark, cold air at all times. Hope you enjoy your remaining stay- we won't be there much longer, but we could see a return…
Lughaidh- Nice avatar, haha… And thanks a lot! I hope the lands we travel to in Nadya will all leave a mark on your mind.
Maritalbliss- Thank you! Be sure to stick around, things get better!
Dangerfunk- She is a bit silly… I wonder what you all think about her and where she might have come from. Does she even -have- a past? Anyway, Believe me, Charna could do it. She -may- even prove it sometime…
katyas at 9:30PM, May 10, 2008
Charna rocks. Gotta love someone who can eat the opposition, right? Am I right? Right. ;-) Commenting long after the fact isn't nearly as much fun in some ways - but in others it is really a LOT of fun, 'cause you can say really outRAGEOUS things and very few people will even know ... ;-)
simonitro at 11:28AM, Oct. 14, 2007
Is it wise to follow her? But what the heck...
Ladyknight17 at 12:34PM, July 21, 2007
Creepy old people....and spiders....and a Elf snob. Cool.
TheMidge28 at 7:51AM, July 21, 2007
So the spider protector...is it a shade?
Darkmax at 9:37PM, July 4, 2007
Excellent story Excellent atmosphere Excellent Art What else can I say? Excellent all around Look forward to more Byron (The Devilfish Project)
Ries at 2:44PM, June 28, 2007
Steve: The font is Morpheus (http://www.dafont.com/morpheus.font). And the more I think about it, the more I realize that it fits a hell of a lot more than I thought it did in the first place.
SteveMyers22 at 10:36PM, June 27, 2007
Interesting stuff. I like the close up on panel 3 a lot. Can I ask what font you're using for Charna? It seems like the font that The Gravediggaz used to use on their album covers all the time. I always wondered what that one was.
YuiPweeLi at 9:49PM, June 27, 2007
oooooo very intriguing story so far.
freefall_drift at 10:47AM, June 27, 2007
I like the use of shadows to show the transitions of Charna. but the shadows are wonky. It going in front of Nadya but coming off the side of Charna. Nadya was crying in the page, but dry eyed and defiant in this one. Kind of a big jump. Not sure it works. Glad you draw every stone, I like the detail. Great use of color on the stones. I like the poses and expressions on panel 1 & 3.
D0m at 3:47AM, June 27, 2007
This comment box is going haywire! Bekefel: Thanks! I rather rushed that portion, but I'll be keeping you in mind when I make the background for the next few pages. You'll be seeing a -lot- of weather effects...;-) One more week till the next update, folks!! Phil- Glad you noticed!
D0m at 3:46AM, June 27, 2007
Phil- Glad you noticed!
D0m at 3:45AM, June 27, 2007
Bekefel: Thanks! I rather rushed that portion, but I'll be keeping you in mind when I make the background for the next few pages. You'll be seeing a -lot- of weather effects...;-) One more week till the next update, folks!! Phil- Glad you noticed!
dangerfunk at 12:46AM, June 27, 2007
Pssshh. How can you kill someone that's already dead? You dumb spider lady.
maritalbliss at 2:09PM, June 26, 2007
WoW, talk about ambiance. You really know how to set a mood. Fantastically done.
Lughaidh at 12:55PM, June 26, 2007
I have to concur with slimredninja, the comic is very atmospheric. It kind of reminds me of White Wolf's Changling roleplaying game. If you're familiar with that. The whole soft yet dark thing is really cool. Keep up the good work. /fav'd
slimredninja at 5:44AM, June 26, 2007
beautiful you got mad skillz the atmosphere you convey is sick.
Nepath at 4:28AM, June 26, 2007
Nice work on this page, the comic is really flowing well.
cs3ink at 8:56AM, June 25, 2007
I like the feel of this. Right away I felt the tension and mystery.
SilverWordz at 7:42AM, June 25, 2007
No update next week! Noooo! Alright, I suppose that's okay. Sweet page D0m, the art and the story are really coming along.
silentkitty at 10:03PM, June 24, 2007
Nice expressions on the Queen in the first and third panels. She's quite cheeky for someone who was just crying like a baby, hehe. :P And yep, I think it's definitely worth the pain of drawing each cobblestone, it does look better this way. ;)
phillip_the_tortoise at 9:11PM, June 24, 2007
oooooooooo i like the transparent speechbubbles
Bekefel at 5:50PM, June 24, 2007
I like the weather effects in the first panel!
D0m at 2:49PM, June 24, 2007
Tantz Aerine: Always so observant! I can say that Charna favors roaming around the towers. I can't really tell you how long they've been around or who owned them! Terra- Thanks! Blnt and FAL: Thanks, and just wait and see what happens next! Luigi: Nah, you'll be seeing a lot of Charna. She's not a bad guy, but she will -not- hesitate to eat whoever gets in the way of her goals! Dueast: Sorry! I'll work on the font more next time. Anatak: I actually had a lotta trouble with that panel! :O Thanks! Joe- Thanks, and I will be keeping up! Nadya'll be around till I get tired of the comic! I'm expecting 100+ pages. Depending on its success, I may throw in a very trippy arc that'll warp the whole story!
joerocks1981 at 2:33PM, June 24, 2007
the whole presentation absolutely rocks. please keep up with this---it's awesome!
Anatak at 2:16PM, June 24, 2007
I love her expression in the mid panel, pretty... expressive? hehe :)