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json on Oct. 1, 2008
WHAT!? OH NO!! the ring is blown the fuck up!!
so, in the original, this sequence took all of 2 panels to tell. if i hadn't writen it, i honestly wouldn't have even been able to tell what was even supposed to be happening. so i stretched it out for a full page. hoping to capture some half assed sense of story telling.
truth be told, having to redraw these earlier pages….makes me really hate this first chapter. the next 3 pages will attest to that fact 100%. i am sorry in advance.
json at 10:07PM, Oct. 2, 2008
thanks. i'm trying to not be too lazy with these earlier pages. in all honesty, i am more excited about chapter 2 revamps. it is shaping up to be so much more exciting and interactive and comprehensive. it's why i spent 6 hours working on the revamp cover for it....... hell, i'll even finish the final battle in chapter 3!!! simulated gore and all....i just want to get through these next 15 pages not hating myself or losing new readers.
Jason of Powerjeff at 9:13PM, Oct. 2, 2008
I'm glad you reworked this confusing scene. I think Jer and I only knew what was going on with the ring getting shot because you told us. It really does look like you scanned the pencils this time though, so don't get too lazy on the inking; but I'm still giving you a five. We have to keep the story going, after all. This is just the beginning. I love the crying montage at the bottom, especially Haysoose. However, I feel that Chia should always display that glowing Chia smile, even when he's sad.
json at 8:28PM, Oct. 2, 2008
aww...Bocaj. no tears. i'm just a bit ashamed of the next page....and subsequentially follows it....fart jokes. :( which also appears in page 7 of the original chapter 2. but that is the last time..... oh wait, there's a fart joke in chapter 6. damn it. i'm forever low brow!!!
Bocaj at 3:19PM, Oct. 2, 2008
;_;
json at 11:15PM, Oct. 1, 2008
oh, and on a side note.....what kind of suck is that i am about 2-3 pages ahead on this chapter, and a big part of me just wants to put those pages up already. unfortunately, that would leave me with a couple days of catch up time with inkings.....so, i'm content with just uploaded a page a day. how does that sit with you guys?