The battle is outragiously static, slowpaced, and just a bit boring to read. Your leavign huge chunks of space on the panels that DON'T need to be there. THe sprites blend into the background, try bluring it next time. I don't like the fact that every spoken line takes place on the bottom of the panels, it's annoying. Just use speech bubbles and tails. Your gutters are also very small.
Over all, this needs a lot of work...
This is not very coherent. I have a hard time telling what is happening here.
You also need to find a way to shrink the page down. You don't need to show the entire battlefield in EVERY single panel.
dude don't make these things so big they take ages to load and many people just close the page before it's visible. its also got almost no text or words and the sound effects are poor, i mean when the biggest weapons were fired there were no sound effects at all. and never put black on a dark background if you want people to read it, that is all
Jak0070 at 6:35PM, Nov. 3, 2006
LOL
knuxallen at 2:31PM, Nov. 1, 2006
geez, its soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo big!!!!!!!!!!!
RoronoaZoro at 5:14AM, Oct. 30, 2006
Cool...
anonymous at 3:50PM, Oct. 29, 2006
I like the "*doink*" part
Scorchgofer at 2:17PM, Oct. 29, 2006
What everyone else said.
lefarce at 2:09PM, Oct. 29, 2006
The battle is outragiously static, slowpaced, and just a bit boring to read. Your leavign huge chunks of space on the panels that DON'T need to be there. THe sprites blend into the background, try bluring it next time. I don't like the fact that every spoken line takes place on the bottom of the panels, it's annoying. Just use speech bubbles and tails. Your gutters are also very small. Over all, this needs a lot of work...
Rich at 1:14PM, Oct. 29, 2006
This is not very coherent. I have a hard time telling what is happening here. You also need to find a way to shrink the page down. You don't need to show the entire battlefield in EVERY single panel.
tailsonic at 1:07PM, Oct. 29, 2006
thx for the advice... i think?
knux at 1:04PM, Oct. 29, 2006
dude don't make these things so big they take ages to load and many people just close the page before it's visible. its also got almost no text or words and the sound effects are poor, i mean when the biggest weapons were fired there were no sound effects at all. and never put black on a dark background if you want people to read it, that is all
tailsonic at 12:51PM, Oct. 29, 2006
I forgot to put mecha sonic in Panels two and three. Pretend in penel 2 that he's looking at me, and in panel three, pretend he is looking up.