page 13
shino on Sept. 23, 2008
^w^ kay so i re-did the first 3 pages of chapture 1.
i'll do the rest in to time. (my life) okay im going out with this nice girl right now… she's spunky and tough I LIKE! but there's this chick Dayna that is talking to me shes beautiful funny but, her mom just past away a couple day's ago… so she started smoking pot… to me that's so not atractive. AND! there's this BEAUTIFUL GIRL i just started talking to maybe a chouple day's ago… she's like the good part's of both of them all put in one… im going crazy for her PLUSE SHE HAS A BIKE!!! *sigh* she's just like me with the hole im crazy hyper and such… i realy realy like her. but kinda confused with the other two. hehehe a little peace of my life.
The Satoshi why thank you once again hahaha ^.^
Emeraldas your so sweet, your awsome!!!
chocolate_addict ^w^ your so nice thank you so so much and i like cooch alot and …i kinda hope you dont know what dayna looks like hahaha but i know what you mean. oh and ive been meaning to ask you what does (sp?) mean?
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Dont leave me herebeen added to Pictures.
go check it out ^w^
MeepLover at 12:28PM, July 22, 2010
where did the blood come from?
ReaperEX at 8:44AM, Jan. 24, 2009
Been too long since I've commented Shino! Hope you haven't missed me too much!
lordquake666 at 3:18AM, Dec. 9, 2008
Wow ^^ Seems like your comic is getting really interesting 8D cant wait to see more.
Warpedwenger at 3:49PM, Oct. 27, 2008
Awesome layout for this page it sets a great mood.
Remiera at 6:49PM, Oct. 12, 2008
I really like this story~ Also, your art's gotten a lot better. The flow of the story's a little bad, but other than that, it's great.
Solude at 1:25PM, Sept. 30, 2008
lol i love ur manga
Urd at 1:42PM, Sept. 29, 2008
omg Shino i totaly LOVE you!!! You are gettin better and better with each update and you continue to captivate and ammaze me. . .your art is so beautiful it makes me want to cry!!!!!!
NickGuy at 5:38PM, Sept. 27, 2008
Hi shino...just read your entire comic here and i have to say im very impressed with your overall storytelling ability. Storytelling is impossible to teac, you are either good at it or you arent. The first cover page of your comic blew me away technically. It was, in short, fantastic. your colors breathe such a life into your characters i feel like i could touch them. congratulations on that, that is something very rare and precious. However, Once i read the manga I was taken back by how sloppy and rushed your characters were drawn on the inside. great storytelling cant compensate for rushed pages. I would advise you to slow it down a bit, draw every panel like that first page, and youll have an amazing piece of art. Backgrounds are lacking, which is usually a staple of romantic manga, but even once in awhile you need to throw in something more than what you have. I am all for experimentation and style, believe me (im a huge DK2 fan lol) But that kind of stuff is noticeable. Anyway, you get a 5 overall for this wonderful little comic, but there is definite room for improvement.
Akki333 at 1:08AM, Sept. 25, 2008
haha,the lasp panels are awesome!!XD
WelshMonkey at 10:13PM, Sept. 24, 2008
lol nice XD I would call my friend too if this ever happened, and she'd do the same to me, if I ever got laid by a girl which will probably never happen because I think I turn all the girls I date straight which makes me very...hopeless in relasionships >< DAMN IT
Tamerlane at 9:33PM, Sept. 24, 2008
heh i feel just like her in that last panel
Emeraldas at 2:56PM, Sept. 24, 2008
Uh oh....
femine angel at 11:11AM, Sept. 24, 2008
DD is annoying me! ANYWAYS! MYSTERY TIME! We have to put on detective outfits on. Great page!
Hunter_Fusion at 10:01AM, Sept. 24, 2008
So much ringings x_X
The Satoshi at 11:21PM, Sept. 23, 2008
O_____O That is an odd call I hope she can get dressed before who ever it is comes
Sei at 11:04PM, Sept. 23, 2008
Oh whoa, some history and flashbacking going to happen? Such mystery...
chocolate_addict at 10:29PM, Sept. 23, 2008
I am sooo stupid... I meant to write Akira instead of Dayna... wonder where she knows those eyes from... and love the last set of panels :) sp? is just a shortcut for the word 'spelling' meaning that I wasn't sure of the spelling of that word... hope that explained it ;)