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usedbooks on Sept. 6, 2012
This part had a few rewrites. I finally got it to where the mood was right and it accomplished what I wanted it to. Then I had a helpful conversation with Tantz Aerine about the pacing and presentation on the next couple pages. Reshuffling of lines meant I had to make another new draft of this page, and I had room to expand the dialogue and fit in more panels. (Actually, I might have gotten carried away. It turned out rather wordy.) One of my favorite additions is Fudo's angry reaction and Kaida calling him stupid. ;)
For those who need a refresher, Jerry was introduced on page 9 and met his end on page 279. He was UB's first villain.
plymayer: Thanks!
Tantz: ^_^ Kaida has unique but usually unexpressed viewpoints.
crazy_goodfellow: It didn't start so well either. :P
Peipei: XD There was some amount of loss of innocence going on.
roycemarie: It's okay to hate Fudo. He's had a heck of a rocky character development (and is still a crazy unpredictable serial killer). – It's okay to like him too. Or you can do both, like Kaida does. ;)
ghostrunner: That it is.
Anubis at 3:56AM, Sept. 7, 2012
that is a very good point!
ghostrunner at 10:10PM, Sept. 6, 2012
i regret bad acting
roycemarie at 7:12PM, Sept. 6, 2012
Thanks, Vickie. I feel better now. Love the last panel.
Tantz_Aerine at 2:49PM, Sept. 6, 2012
very intense atmosphere :D
Peipei at 12:37PM, Sept. 6, 2012
I wonder if he's ever really killed anybody for a really legitimate reason :o
plymayer at 1:37AM, Sept. 6, 2012
Great page layout.