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usedbooks on April 15, 2009

I rewrote the dialogue on the top half of the page –twice. The first rewrite was because thoughts didn't flow well, and it didn't get enough closure on the Mina thing. The second time I rewrote it was because it lost Mike's fatalistic attitude, the reason he's not fighting back. (Like when he confronted Kaida and when he dealt with the psycho bank robber.)

–1st draft–
Mike: Mina had nothing to do with this; did she? How dare you use her like that!
Meredith: I'm all torn up about it. Really. Heartbroken.
Mike: You have every right to kill me. Just do it already.
Meredith: Oh, I plan to. But don't deny me my fun.

–2nd draft–
Mike: *same as final draft*
Meredith: *same as final draft*
Mike: She thinks I hate her… And now I can't apologize. At least she won't miss me when I'm gone.
Meredith: Aw. That's so touching. I think I'm gonna cry. Or you are.

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Warpedwenger: I'm not fluent in the language of art, so if you can follow the actions, that's a step in the right direction.

ghostrunner: -_-

Kristen: I was thinking the same thing about the fountain. I suffer from changing-proportions syndrome. ^_^;

DAJB: Last time she brought chains. XD Meredith is a real crowd-pleaser.

Peipei: Thanks. ^_^ Mike didn't really pass out, he was just dazed. Although he could have been out for a moment. It would make more sense then just coincidentally lading in a perfect handcuffing position.

n_y_japlander: Thanks. I don't notice much improvement these days, but maybe I am. If so, that's great! No one wants to plateau with their skills.

Tantz: He is. The kid can't catch a break.

amanda: Me too. -_- I have actually severely injured myself just getting out of bed and tripping.

Jonko: According to Meredith, *Mike* is the killer, but his exploits are far inferior to hers.

patrickdevine -)

LanceDanger: Interesting indeed.

blntmaker: You're right that I don't incorporate sound effects often. It's mostly because I don't feel confident enough to use them properly.